khaim100
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this time for last release

calamarain
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khaim100 wrote:
this time for last release

Quite a chaotic hold, but I suppose that's the idea.

It could use a little more polish though - just little things like capital letters at the start of each of the sentences, looks slightly nicer Same for all the guards in the first room that die on the first move, do you need them in there at all? Why not delete them all except those that will survive.

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jbluestein
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calamarain wrote:

khaim100 wrote:
this time for last release

Quite a chaotic hold, but I suppose that's the idea.

It could use a little more polish though - just little things like capital letters at the start of each of the sentences, looks slightly nicer Same for all the guards in the first room that die on the first move, do you need them in there at all? Why not delete them all except those that will survive.

The somewhat random sing-song nature of the scrolls and the meaningless deaths are sort of a trademark of the War series. It grows on you after a while, sort of.

Josh

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Davido
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Rock & Roll !!!...

Banjooie
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calamarain wrote:
It could use a little more polish though -

no, war holds aren't supposed to have polish

it's part of their appeal

bdwing
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I noticed that I had two war15 holds on my computer and no war14 hold.

Is this one abandoned?

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