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I'm as free as a bard now, and a bard you cannot change.

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Pinnacle wrote:
I'm as free as a bard now, and a bard you cannot change.

Within the field of poetry my mind will freely range . . .

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Pinnacle wrote:
I'm as free as a bard now, and a bard you cannot change.
Our Pinnacle's free as a bard
But his iamb seems patchy and scarred.
I don't want to seem rude,
But I have to conclude
That iambic pentameter's hard. :smartass:

Note: Not my "ass" up there -- 'tis a bug in the forum code that replaces ": smartass" with the appropriate smiley, methinks.
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Znirk just wrote a new verse,
With words peculiarly terse
If his “ass” is a part,
That he thinks is smart,
His brain cells must be very scarce!

;)

Sorry - this was the best I could come up with at short notice!

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The classical limerick is such:
Youth leaning on age as a crutch.
A diamond turned carbon.
Old newspaper jargon.
A hedgehog who longs to be touched.

The form is in need of revival.
What use is the listless archival
most casual joke
that some drunkard spoke?
How can it cling to survival?

I ask for you all to be cautious.
One far too easily washes
the colors with whites,
the darks with the lights,
and sickens the laundry considerably.
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Hey! Your last line doesn't rhyme
I think you should spend more time
Working on your form
obeying the norm
And fix your poetic crime.

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In my own minds eye,
I don't recall lemericks
being poetry;

and as such things are,
I cannot let things be left
by peer influence.

If I didn't catch,
a game made by my Drodites,
a sad boy I am.

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Poetry slam
is where I am
but I'm 'fraid to say
I'll stay away
as rhyming's not something I'm very proficient at to be honest.

:P

np: Clint Mansell - You Know What You Are? (Clint Mansell Remix) (Doom OST)

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We really must choose better words
The verbal whey from the curds.
In writing a chorus
we hope will not bore us
and not select textual . . . bloomers!

:w00t
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I dunno what you say,
But I don't wanna pay
for one bad translator,
One worse than potato,
then I shall end this text
and give a chance for next.

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I'faith, 'twould seem to me this forum thread
Hath quickly stray'd from its declarèd aim!
Admittedly I am myself to blame
That meter hath from iambs wanderèd.

Five anapestic verses? 'Tain't the same.
The verse form from the subject line hath fled.
What now? to call it "Limericks!" instead?
Shall we convert this to a forum game?

But then, mayhap I niggle to excess.
We, gentle friends, seem happy to accept
That curious posts will curious answers bring.

Off-topic posts can yet the crowd impress
If to their proper forum zone they're kept:
Here, after all, is room for "Anything".
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Our friend has now written a sonnet;
A pretty rhyme it has upon it.
Iambic pentameter
Is his parameter -
Truly, a bee in his bonnet!

sorry to lower the tone again! :blush
but this is such fun!! :D

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Wow, I never knew that poetry could be so addicting! I love doing this!

I don't really know,
but writing poetry isn't just for show.
It presents your skills,
your dislikes, and your gills.
Poetry is like eating food to go.
The feeling is gone so fast,
you can't tell what's present or past!

Hey, how is it going?
I really tried to write a Haiku,
It smelled like a shoe.

Poetry is not my thing,
Passion and love are not my fling
My gong gave a ding.

Cool, I have a dime!
This next line might be a rhyme
Go away, don't waste time!

Aliens plus lotsa otherworldly creatures
Please come down and eat my teachers!
Otherwise I'll watch creature features.

Spend you money,
waste your time,
Work hard honey,
please earn a dime.

Ketchup and mustard
are essential, like custard
In order to make a perfect sandwich
That you can eat, 'tis my only wish.
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Tokyokid
Seems to have more or less strung together words that rhyme, and I'm not sure why he did.
I have to say that you
Are probably better off sticking to the Clerihew.
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Smitery Smitery
Rob (known as Pinnacle)
Wanted to start up a
Poetry thread.

People keep posting in
Other non-Bardic forms,
Semi-contrarily.
(Blank verse is dead.)
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What is an iamb; for time cannot tell?
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Yellow_Mage wrote:
In my own minds eye,
I don't recall lemericks
being poetry;
Those who write haiku
should not ridicule other
persons' poetic forms.

(Except me of course,
for I am satirical
[five more syllables])

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A haiku doesn't need,
it doesn't beg to be exactly
a five seven five, but;

The pattern in sound,
or syllables even is
much more important.

A six nine six,
a five seven five,
a four five four;

Perfection;
just made by this
example.

And, obviously;
you missed the limerick tag.
Oh, well. No harm done.

:D

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The City Beneath
Is coming, creeping slowly
Like the tiger.

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My hat is in hand
Sartorial edible
Fryer on standby

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mrimer wrote:
The City Beneath
Is coming, creeping slowly
Like the tiger.

Is this poem to speak
Such mention of jungle cat
Could it really be?

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Perhaps we should just name this thread "Poetry" with the subtitle "formerly Iambic Pentameter"?
mrimer wrote:
The City Beneath
Is coming, creeping slowly
Like the tiger.
Rimer! Rimer! Coding right
With less than 1% to write!
What other mortal hand or eye
Could code this game I want to buy?
Kipling parody, anyone?

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Any old fool can
Write haiku just stop at the
Seventeenth syllab

Ode to my Ego:
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This shirt amuses
I wanted it, but bad news:
No more in large now.


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hippopotamus
antihippopotamus
annihilation

(from Kingdom of Loathing)
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We’ve all caught the poetry bug
It’s giving our brain cells a tug
And now it’s amusing
‘cause we’re all busy using
Our skills to give DROD a good plug!

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Depends how it's done
Haikus are a peice of *bunnies* (number 1 as opposed to number 2)
Purple monkey dishwasher rhymes with phone.

I had something that I was going to say but it escaped me. As usual... :P

I prefer doing the alt version of the line number = numbers of words used.

Time;
Forwards,
Progressive,
Continuous,
The World in Motion;
An Interval in Space,
Irreversible Events;
The Fourth Dimension of Movement;
Controlling the Path of Our Future,
Unless You are using a Time Machine.

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Znirk mentioned
Kingdom of Loathing
Place inventioned,
With loats of things.

They kill you, when you are playing,
but they beat you, when you are praying!
Big,
Twig,
of craziness and pig.

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Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary,
Over many a quaint and curious volume of forgotten lore,
While I nodded, nearly napping, suddenly there came a tapping,
As of some one gently rapping, rapping at my chamber door.
"'Tis some visiter," I muttered, "tapping at my chamber door --
Only this, and nothing more."
Ah, distinctly I remember it was in the bleak December,
And each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor.
Eagerly I wished the morrow; -- vainly I had tried to borrow
From my books surcease of sorrow -- sorrow for the lost Lenore --
For the rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore --
Nameless here for evermore.
And the silken sad uncertain rustling of each purple curtain
Thrilled me -- filled me with fantastic terrors never felt before;
So that now, to still the beating of my heart, I stood repeating
"'Tis some visiter entreating entrance at my chamber door --
Some late visiter entreating entrance at my chamber door; --
This it is, and nothing more."
Presently my soul grew stronger; hesitating then no longer,
"Sir," said I, "or Madam, truly your forgiveness I implore;
But the fact is I was napping, and so gently you came rapping,
And so faintly you came tapping, tapping at my chamber door,
That I scarce was sure I heard you " -- here I opened wide the door; ----
Darkness there and nothing more.
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before;
But the silence was unbroken, and the darkness gave no token,
And the only word there spoken was the whispered word, "Lenore!"
This I whispered, and an echo murmured back the word, "Lenore!" --
Merely this, and nothing more.
Then into the chamber turning, all my soul within me burning,
Soon I heard again a tapping somewhat louder than before.
"Surely," said I, "surely that is something at my window lattice;
Let me see, then, what thereat is, and this mystery explore --
Let my heart be still a moment and this mystery explore;--
'Tis the wind and nothing more!"
Open here I flung the shutter, when, with many a flirt and flutter,
In there stepped a stately raven of the saintly days of yore;
Not the least obeisance made he; not an instant stopped or stayed he;
But, with mien of lord or lady, perched above my chamber door --
Perched upon a bust of Pallas just above my chamber door --
Perched, and sat, and nothing more.
Then this ebony bird beguiling my sad fancy into smiling,
By the grave and stern decorum of the countenance it wore,
"Though thy crest be shorn and shaven, thou," I said, "art sure no craven,
Ghastly grim and ancient raven wandering from the Nightly shore --
Tell me what thy lordly name is on the Night's Plutonian shore!"
Quoth the raven "Nevermore."
Much I marvelled this ungainly fowl to hear discourse so plainly,
Though its answer little meaning -- little relevancy bore;
For we cannot help agreeing that no sublunary being
Ever yet was blessed with seeing bird above his chamber door --
Bird or beast upon the sculptured bust above his chamber door,
With such name as "Nevermore."
But the raven, sitting lonely on the placid bust, spoke only
That one word, as if his soul in that one word he did outpour.
Nothing further then he uttered -- not a feather then he fluttered --
Till I scarcely more than muttered "Other friends have flown before --
On the morrow he will leave me, as my hopes have flown before."
Quoth the raven "Nevermore."
Wondering at the stillness broken by reply so aptly spoken,
"Doubtless," said I, "what it utters is its only stock and store
Caught from some unhappy master whom unmerciful Disaster
Followed fast and followed faster so when Hope he would adjure --
Stern Despair returned, instead of the sweet Hope he dared adjure --
That sad answer, "Never -- nevermore."
But the raven still beguiling all my sad soul into smiling,
Straight I wheeled a cushioned seat in front of bird, and bust and door;
Then, upon the velvet sinking, I betook myself to linking
Fancy unto fancy, thinking what this ominous bird of yore --
What this grim, ungainly, ghastly, gaunt and ominous bird of yore
Meant in croaking "Nevermore."
This I sat engaged in guessing, but no syllable expressing
To the fowl whose fiery eyes now burned into my bosom's core;
This and more I sat divining, with my head at ease reclining
On the cushion's velvet lining that the lamp-light gloated o'er,
But whose velvet violet lining with the lamp-light gloating o'er,
She shall press, ah, nevermore!
Then, methought, the air grew denser, perfumed from an unseen censer
Swung by Angels whose faint foot-falls tinkled on the tufted floor.
"Wretch," I cried, "thy God hath lent thee -- by these angels he hath sent thee
Respite -- respite and nepenthe, from thy memories of Lenore;
Let me quaff this kind nepenthe and forget this lost Lenore!"
Quoth the raven "Nevermore."
"Prophet!" said I, "thing of evil! -- prophet still, if bird or devil! --
Whether Tempter sent, or whether tempest tossed thee here ashore,
Desolate yet all undaunted, on this desert land enchanted --
On this home by Horror haunted -- tell me truly, I implore --
Is there -- is there balm in Gilead? -- tell me -- tell me, I implore!"
Quoth the raven "Nevermore."
"Prophet!" said I, "thing of evil -- prophet still, if bird or devil!
By that Heaven that bends above us -- by that God we both adore --
Tell this soul with sorrow laden if, within the distant Aidenn,
It shall clasp a sainted maiden whom the angels name Lenore --
Clasp a rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore."
Quoth the raven "Nevermore."
"Be that word our sign in parting, bird or fiend!" I shrieked, upstarting --
"Get thee back into the tempest and the Night's Plutonian shore!
Leave no black plume as a token of that lie thy soul hath spoken!
Leave my loneliness unbroken! -- quit the bust above my door!
Take thy beak from out my heart, and take thy form from off my door!"
Quoth the raven "Nevermore."
And the raven, never flitting, still is sitting, still is sitting
On the pallid bust of Pallas just above my chamber door;
And his eyes have all the seeming of a demon that is dreaming,
And the lamp-light o'er him streaming throws his shadow on the floor;
And my soul from out that shadow that lies floating on the floor
Shall be lifted -- nevermore!

now thars an old poem!

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And with the clicking, came the ticking, of the page that was no more
Quoth the server, "404"
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