Neathro
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File: Name required_300.hold (6.3 MB)
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License: Public Domain

Here are some ideas, please help me to make them into my first proper hold.

Thanks in advance, there's no beta board yet.

Update!
Another update!
Comment: ERIK? HAS SOMEONE ELSE GONE ON YOUR ACCOUNT?!?!?!
The small print: It was probably my fault...


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[Last edited by Neathro at 06-21-2007 06:21 PM]

voyager
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I think you have a good start with the monster manipulation concept that seems to be the theme of the first level. One thing you might want to do is find more ways to add variety to the basic concept, or make the players alter their strategy somewhat for different rooms. (The way you have it now, each subsequent room adds more/different monsters, but the basic strategy is the same. Not necessarily a bad thing, but it's fun to have to try new things in each room.)

My other suggestions would be to develop the story a bit (I wasn't at all sure what was going on between the player and the rock giant "king," or why the guards killed him), add some checkpoints and maybe make the room layouts more interesting (if there's a lot of empty floor space that the player won't use or need, you can do something else with it, whether it be another puzzle or just some scenery).

Neathro
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OK, give me some time...

EDIT: I may be a while before more updates, sorry.


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[Last edited by Neathro at 06-01-2007 07:15 AM]

Neathro
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Bump.
I'm working on this project again.

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Bingbing
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What hold? I don't see it anywhere in the topic! Maybe it's

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Monkey
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Neathro, a tip when making a hold on the Architecture board:
Even if you're working on the hold, you might want to keep the attachment until the new version is ready. And when that comes, replace the file.
Edit: RE to Bingbing: Why was your sentence cut off?

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[Last edited by Monkey at 06-20-2007 12:07 AM]

Jason
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Monkey wrote:
Edit: RE to Bingbing: Why was your sentence cut off?

He was taken by the suspense.

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Jason wrote:

Monkey wrote:
Edit: RE to Bingbing: Why was your sentence cut off?

He was taken by the suspense.

No, it's an

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[Last edited by NiroZ at 06-20-2007 09:20 AM]

Neathro
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This is all getting so silly I'm on the edge of
EDIT: Who thinks I should make a beta board? are beta boards meant for when I haven't got any more ideas?
My membership expired .


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[Last edited by Neathro at 06-21-2007 06:24 PM]