I don't want to be overly critical, and from reading the posts above this may actually be your first hold rather than your previous offering, but there's really not a lot to recommend here - beginners may find some benefit but there aren't really any interesting rooms so it's basically high score fodder for anyone who's slightly competent at this game.
I've never built a hold in my life (and don't particularly have any plans to) but I have played lots so I'm going to offer a few recommendations that I'd hope you will bear in mind for your next hold:
* Hold name - please make it case sensitive as it just looks better - you'd only need to change 3 characters to achieve that for this hold.
* Spelling and punctuation in general - following on from the above, I've mentioned this quite a few times - holds seem that much more professional when an effort has been made to ensure spelling, punctuation and grammar are correct. I've made this offer in the past, but I'd be quite happy to proof read holds for anyone who'd like me to.
* You've already mentioned the level entrance text - if there's anything you don't know then don't be afraid to ask - there are lots of really helpful people here who will be glad to assist you.
* Having floor at the edge of rooms which doesn't lead to another room is generally frowned upon. There's not a lot of that here but on the couple of occasions where it does occur, it isn't necessary and could quite easily be replaced by walls.
* Level Entrance Placement - I think every single level had the same position and sword orientation for the level entrance (this is possibly the case for your other hold). Don't be afraid to vary it to provide a bit more interest.
* The majority of your puzzle rooms contain a small puzzle and lots of empty space - you'd be much better shrinking the rooms by enclosing them within walls or other blocking elements. This would also potentially make some of the rooms a bit more tricky.
* Having a bit more decoration in your rooms would improve the experience, even if they don't have anything to do with the puzzles.
* The most useful thing to do is to take a look at other holds (eg. Suwako Prizes is another recent debut hold that does a lot of things right). Obviously you can't just copy other peoples work but you should hopefully get some ideas that you can put into use for your future holds.
In conclusion, I hope you do make more holds and try and take on board some of the advice you are getting. I imagine you are quite young and I know what it's like at that age when you think you know everything (my son is starting to get a bit like this...) but there are a lot of people here who will be more than willing to help you out in the future.
My verdict:
Difficulty: 2
Fun: 2
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