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×To be honest, I was a bit disappointed with the entries, with only few exceptions.
My main concern with most of these entries is that they didn't feel like they were in-universe fairy tales, which I understood to be the point of the contest. They may be fairy tales for our standards, but in a world where kids learn the dangers of man-sized flesh-eating roaches before even going to elementary school (I guess), they're Tuesday.
(I do realize that the whole which-monsters-are-known-to-the-average-surfacer-thing is a bit tricky, but I'm pretty sure they know roaches. I mean, they're everywhere!)
(Also, I do admit that my own entry could also be explained without any supernatural devices other than the fish potion, but as I said in the submissions topic, it's not meant to be a fairy tale in the classic sense anyway.)
Instead, a lot of the entries seemed to concentrate on describing the actual hold. While I admit my entry fell a bit short on that term, I felt that some others were overdoing it and forgetting to add an actual plotline. Even though being able turn it into a hold was a criterion, I thought that this contest had been a great opportunity to break the mold of the usual DROD-like storytelling, which I felt some entries had missed. (Also, for me as an architect, it would seem a lot more challenging and thus fun to implement plotlines other than »He went into that room and killed that goblin via that firetrap«, though that might be a personal preference.)
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×#1: Well, it did have a plot, but not a fantastic one (not speaking of quality, but of, you know, fantasy elements). Also, I was pretty puzzled whether or not the giant and the king were the same character, which I had to dock a few points for. Sorry. 6/10
#2: Mine. As I'm not entirely sure how popular this story is outside of Germany, I just want to point out that this was an attempted spoof/deconstruction of the traditional German fairy tale »The Fisherman and his Wife«, which I decided to do after coming up with the whole genesis-of-the-Spoostlefish myth. I guess it lost some of its wit during translation and there are definitely some fridge plot holes, but hopefully it's still enjoyable.
#3: Okay. This felt like something really clever, but looking at the votes, it seems like I'm not the only one who's just not getting it. Were the phrases of the voices actually supposed to mean something? Were they meant to be open for interpretation, possibly for a really creative architect? Or were they simply nonsense? 6/10
#4: Quite funny and enjoyable. I like how Whatzisname reflected some of his adventures later on instead of describing them immediately, which set it apart from most of the other stories. Two problems: a) Again, it did only describe a delver conquering a hold, without any fantastic plot elements. b) At some points, it seemed to try too hard to be clever. Yeah, some of those footnotes were funny, but I'm just not really into that post-modern stuff, sorry. 8/10
#5: Hm, I don't know. I thought this contest was a great way to use some other main character than an exterminator, so I found this a bit uninteresting. Plus points for actually using a supernatural element. Minus points for the absurd plot: Even if all monsters are her pets and not just the one in her cave, why would the witch let the delvers kill so many of her precious pets and not just curse them as soon as they enter her realm? I realize this might have been done on purpose, but in that case, maybe a small lampshade would've helped. 6/10
#6: Yeah. That one was okay. Nothing special, though. Also, if the first suitor is already dead, why even bother trying? Here's a piece of advice from the king of relationships: If she needs you to bring her a Skrekken skull to prove your love, she's probably not worth it. Also, were you trying to hang a lampshade somewhere? Because if so, I didn't get it. 7/10
#7: I liked the framing device. The main plot suffered from the same issues as many other entries, though. 7/10
#8: The last one I read, and finally the entry I was waiting for. Maybe a bit cliched, but very clever overall (and it is supposed to be a fairy tale, after all). And hey, prophecies! Finally a decent supernatural element. (Again, though: Were you hanging any lampshades? I thought I had understood that concept, but apparently I'm too daft to see them) 10/10
#9: Okay, basically this one has the same problems I mentioned before, but given the form of it, I think it's forgivable in this case. Escpecially since it's very funny, very clever and very cute. 10/10