I'll take a look at this hold and give you some feedback on it... today's a day where I have some free time
EDIT:
So far, it looks like you have a good start and premise to this hold. It's nowhere near complete, though, so I hope you start that second level soon.
The Entrance:
First, this entire cave seems to have checkerboard tiles for no reason. If this is a cave, why isn't the floor rock or dirt?
Second, the cutscene in the Entrance repeats if Beethro backtracks to the room. I'd either have this cutscene script end after the first time it is done, or keep Beethro from backtracking from Once South to the Entrance once he gets there.
Once South:
It's really dark in this room, so I had trouble spotting this other person that Beethro was talking about. Also, why did you hide the acknowledgements scroll in Once South Once West behind secret wall? That's something that people should be able to find easily.
Once East:
I know those first three lines of speech were cut off because I advanced too quickly towards the end of the path. Perhaps if that started sooner I would be able to watch those lines, then continue onward and trigger the cutscene (which should last a bit longer than three 175-ms turns)
EDIT AGAIN:
Oh, er, sorry, I had downloaded the version in the first post of the thread. It's an architectural convention to always post the most recent version of the hold in the first post and edit that whenever a new version is made, and since the hold attached to the first post is the one that gets uploaded to the HA interface, I'd recommend that you attach the most recent version to the top post from now on.
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[Last edited by Chaco at 05-17-2008 05:05 PM]