Hidan
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File: War Of Sides.hold (29.8 KB)
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I bought TCB yesterday,and built a hold,that has Tetris style puzzle(I dont know if there is something like that but it makes you think) and aboveground battle (battle on platforms) stuff and a story,including Stalwart Army and young Slayers

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Odyssey
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...wouldn't it be better to work on perfecting one hold rather than make multiple holds? Are you planning to submit all three holds?

Nevertheless, I'll test this one, I guess...

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Hidan
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I will submit this one,if u dont like other,not my first hold

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Odyssey
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Could you make your holds anyone edit please? This is the third hold where you've not done this - it would do the testers a huge favour by making it so they can quickly skim over your work.

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Hidan
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File: War Of Sides.hold (29.8 KB)
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Ok,is there an error?

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tokyokid
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Quick skim reveals no big problems. Besides the spelling of corse.

vittro
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tokyokid wrote:
Besides the spelling of corse.

Irony

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Hidan
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tokyokid wrote:
Besides the spelling of corse.

Sorry,bad spelling ,I know but I cant prevent it

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Hidan wrote:

tokyokid wrote:
Besides the spelling of corse.

Sorry,bad spelling ,I know but I cant prevent it

I could perhaps help you with that Hidan. (I have done this in the past for others here.) If you can attach a file with just the text of your Hold(s) I will look through it and offer suggestions on spelling and grammar if you like.

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Hidan
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That would be great! I will send a PM for you with attachment,but wait tomorrow cuz its 2 AM and I gotta sleep,tired , and thanks for the offer,the attachment will be ready , tomorrow night, cuz my friends gonna come to my house,and I am looking forward to learn spelling,and also insult my own english teachers

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Banjooie
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I for one am staggeringly alarmed that the holds I have been playing previously had fake puzzles and story.